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marilors (asker) Jan 29, 2015:

Vă mulțumesc pentru propuneri!

Lara Barnett Jan 29, 2015:

@ Sandra & Kenneth - "As long as .." Asker's line. "As long as we live on this land" was Marilor's suggested first line (i.e. the Asker's composition). I only added 3 lines of my own to this after using her suggestion for this first line.
With regard to this also being a "minor issue", the fact that it was followed by "we still", removed the conditional suggestion of the phrase in a "minor" way.
I would just like to add that I have neither meant to offend, nor to argue with you over usage in the English language. I am simply providing information and experience gathered from my own personal history of using the English language to the native level that I do.

Sandra & Kenneth Grossman Jan 29, 2015:

Nod in papura So long as on this earth we walk
A spark of holiness we hold
The childhood home and village mill
The wooden steeple on the hill

How about correcting your own "not minor issue": "As long as we live on this land"

Lara Barnett Jan 29, 2015:

@ Sandra & Kenneth Here is the meaning of "as long as" (which is not the same as "For as long as")

"1 provided that <can do as they like as long as they have a B average>"
http://www.merriam-webster.com/dictionary/as long as

Lara Barnett Jan 29, 2015:

@ Sandra & Kenneth This is not a minor issue. "As long as + verb phrase" is not the same thing as saying "For as long as...". As i said "As long as" has two meanings, which are very different.

Sandra & Kenneth Grossman Jan 29, 2015:

Same phrase as the earlier two entries The problem is that "For as long ..." doesn't scan properly any more and is a minor issue anyway.
:)

Lara Barnett Jan 29, 2015:

@ Sandra & Kenneth "As long as" sounds a little ambiguous due to its phrasing. ("As long as" has two meanings, one being conditional and one indicating a duration of time). You would be better to put "For as long as" to avoid the ambiguity of the conditional sense of the phrase.

Sandra & Kenneth Grossman Jan 29, 2015:

Nu cine stie ce rima... As long as on this earth we walk
A spark of holiness we hold
The childhood home and village mill
The wooden steeple on the hill

Lara Barnett Jan 29, 2015:

Does this work? As long as we live on this land
Holiness remains in our hand
with our field, our village home,
A steeple and a hilly slope.

marilors (asker) Jan 29, 2015:

As long as we live on this land,
We still have a holy thing,
A plain, a native village,
A bell tower on the hill.

Lara Barnett Jan 29, 2015:

@ Marilors But you need to start the text and then the answers can find a rhyme. You cannot ask people to translate four lines for you, and then call it one question.

marilors (asker) Jan 29, 2015:

I know LaraBarnett, but I need verses with rhyme!

Lara Barnett Jan 29, 2015:

@ Marilors The questions are normally based on one term per entry. This needs to be broken up, or at least some of your own ideas given.