Jun 8, 2005 07:08
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no business with me on sunny days
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“I have business with you,” Gobo leaned toward him.
“No business with me on sunny days. Sunny days for baking in the sun!” said the cat and turned his belly to the warm sun again.
Dear native English speakers!
Please advise if such form of an answer sound OK. Perhaps I should omit 'with me' to make it sound better?
This is my translation from Russian.
“No business with me on sunny days. Sunny days for baking in the sun!” said the cat and turned his belly to the warm sun again.
Dear native English speakers!
Please advise if such form of an answer sound OK. Perhaps I should omit 'with me' to make it sound better?
This is my translation from Russian.
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+5
20 mins
Balasubramaniam L.
India
India
India
Fast, accurate, elegant translation
Native in: Hindi 
Works in: English to Hindi, Hindi
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Don't talk of business on sunny days. Sunny days are basking in the sun
Don't talk of business on sunny days. Sunny days are basking in the sun...
Also there is a distinction in meaning "baking" and "basking". The former is a torture, while the latter is a pleasurable activity.
You probably mean the second term, i.e., "basking".
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Note added at 23 mins (2005-06-08 07:32:11 GMT)
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Typo: please read as:
Don\'t talk of business on sunny days. Sunny days are FOR basking in the sun...
Also there is a distinction in meaning "baking" and "basking". The former is a torture, while the latter is a pleasurable activity.
You probably mean the second term, i.e., "basking".
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Note added at 23 mins (2005-06-08 07:32:11 GMT)
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Typo: please read as:
Don\'t talk of business on sunny days. Sunny days are FOR basking in the sun...
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Tony M
: You make a very good point about 'basking'
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msherms
: yep - agree with basking
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Thanks.
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Alexandra Tussing
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Thanks.
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Refugio
: Right on both counts.
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Thanks, Ruth.
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Alfa Trans (X)
1 day 6 hrs
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Thanks.
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4 KudoZ points awarded for this answer.
Comment: "Thank you very much for your help! Thanks everybody!!!"
3 mins
Terence Ajbro
Sweden
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A multilingual Englishman
Native in: English
Works in: English to German, English to Danish, Danish to English, and 7 more.
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sounds ok to me
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no business with me on sunny days
It sounds good to me. The only thing I would change is in the next sentence: Sunny days **are meant** for baking in the sun
+4
8 mins
I don't do business on sunny days. Sunny days are for....
and turned his belly back to
Peer comment(s):
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Tony M
: Yes, I feel this is a much more natural way of putting it, unless you deliberately want the cat to have a 'foreigner' sound to him?
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jrb
38 mins
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msherms
7 hrs
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Alexandra Tussing
10 hrs
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Refugio
: I think more is intended than just "I don't do business on sunny days." I think the cat means that sunny days are not appropriate for anyone's going business, not just himself.
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COMMENT [not for grading)
I just wanted to explain why I don't personally care for the 'No business with me' construction.
In the first sentence, "I have business with you" is OK, because Gobo wants to do business with the cat.
But in the cat's reply, it sounds a little odd, as it feels as if the 'with' is being used in a different way: "with me, there's no business..."
You could say "No-one does business with me on..."
or else I prefer the suggestion of "I don't do business (you could add: with anyone) on..."
Do you see what I mean about the way the meaning of 'with' may or may not appear to change?
In the first sentence, "I have business with you" is OK, because Gobo wants to do business with the cat.
But in the cat's reply, it sounds a little odd, as it feels as if the 'with' is being used in a different way: "with me, there's no business..."
You could say "No-one does business with me on..."
or else I prefer the suggestion of "I don't do business (you could add: with anyone) on..."
Do you see what I mean about the way the meaning of 'with' may or may not appear to change?
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7 hrs
There's no doing business with me on sunny days
Just another option:
There's no doing business with me on sunny days
There's no doing business with me on sunny days
Discussion
"We like the dark," said the dwarves. "Dark for dark business! There are many hours before dawn."
That's what made me leave out 'are'. But if it's not a very good idea, I'll put it back.